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Question: Please read and tell me what you think!?
With a piece of thread,
she stitches up
Everything in silence!.
But still, echoing in the canyons,
forever, are promises that were destined
To be broken!.
Shattered glass could fall on the floor,
And she could bleed,
But not say a word!.
Why would she!?
Speak!.!.!. not at all,
At least, not when there are people around
People with ears, ready to burn her skin,
Ready to drown her,
If she says one word out of place!.
But then, is there even someone
Who is willing to stop
And try to make a silenced girl
Bless or curse the world
With voice!?
Or is the world much to loud,
screaming, to even notice
A girl with no voice, no mouth,
But with so many thoughts!?
Afraid to express
Because expression has always been pain!.
Fearful of the world,
Fearful that her voice, ringing in the wind,
Will break the little peace
Maintained in the world!.
So, she refuses to
Speak!.!.!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Im not so sure if its a poem or a short story!.
If its a short story is is interesting to read and you use words really well!. The story wouldnt be very modern (because the whole sewing)!. But i could understand if it was a metaphor for something more meaningful
If its a poem, yes it is true it doesnt ryhme but some of the best poems dont!. A good example is langston hughes!.!.!.a great sucessful poet but yet didnt use ryhme scemes at least 50% of the time!.
I think it is very nice and you use great depth!. I think you could be very sucessful!. Maybe a little work but there is always something to improve on!.
KEEP IT UP!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
You really need to check yourself be 4 you wreck yourself honey! try to write about happy and beautiful things, I get a very strong feeling like that you are feeling trapped and unloved am I right!? Free your self from the guilt that you have all of the bad things that have happened to you are not your fault!! FORGIVENESS of self and others is imperitive! God will show you what you need to know!!But you will need to ask him for forgiveness for yourself and those who have hurt you, and in order to do that you will need to speak!! good luck GOD BLESS YOU A HUNDRED TIMES STAY POSITIVE,EVERYTHING IS GONNA BE ALRIGHT!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I LOVE IT it is so beautiful and wonderful it makes me want to cry but smile it doesn't have to rhyme i think it is wonderful is this a poem from your heart or just from thought!? if you get a chance e-mail me more poems! (:
on a scale 1-10 i pick 1,000,000,000 (:Www@QuestionHome@Com
i enjoy it!.and want to say
'A girl with no voice, no mouth,
But with so many thoughts'
But with Afraid!.!.!.!.
And, so, she refuses to Speak!.!.!.!.
i think one day she will Speak!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Oh my goodness!. What a remarkable poem! I was hooked from the first lines!. You really have done quite a lovely job!. I love your stunning imagery and the theme of silence!.
Really, this is quite beautiful!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
i love it :)
whoever said it doesnt even rhyme!. Nesflash!. but poetry doesn't always rhyme!. i think this is a great poem!. i write myself!. how long you been writing for!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
your very talanted, and i loved it!. At points it reminded me of ellen hopkins writings!.
good job and please keep it up
xxoWww@QuestionHome@Com
Brilliant, loved it!. = )Www@QuestionHome@Com
WOW!.!.!.I like it!.!.!.and people poems dont always rhyme!.!.!. a poem is an expression of the soul as well as a story!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It doesn't even rhyme!Www@QuestionHome@Com
It is beautiful!.!.you sound so sad!.!.!.!.!.
Speak up!!Www@QuestionHome@Com