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Question: Would you please read this and tell me what you think!?
This doesn't feel finished!.!.!. i don't how to end it, though!. it's about growing up suddenly because something bad happens, and having to carry those scars your whole life!.
yeah, im in a bad mood tonight, so sorry if it sucks!.



She left a trail of bread crumbs,
Leading back to the grave!.
She hung her mask on the first tree,
And took the next one it gave!.

Once she walked upside down,
On the ceiling of the sky!.
But one day time stole her wings,
And she could no longer fly!.

The end of an old beginning,
But the beginning of a new end!.
Riding the wind with the ghosts,
Bearing wounds nothing can mend!.




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wow, that is alot better then I thought going into the question!.!.!.no offence, just thought ohhhhh another stupid poem about love!.!.!.but I was very surprised!. Thank you for you refreshing poem!

I think it's fine just the way it is!.

Keep writing so I can keep reading please!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Maybe you need to read some real poetry to compare with yours!. This could form in your mind some sense of writing style!. I commend you for your efforts!. Perhaps William Knox can open your poetic mind!. Try reading his poems!. Here is but just one:
http://www!.poetry-archive!.com/k/oh_why_s!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

!.!.SOON AFTER THE SUN AWOKE
SHINING LIGHT INTO HER EYES,
MADE HER FEEL THE WARMTH
DRIED UP THE TOUGHTS THAT MADE HER CRY

THE SCARS WERE VISIBLE,
SHE WAS TIRED OF HIDING THEM AT NIGHT,
YOU MUST BE ABLE TO WALK ALONG WITH SCARS
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just need some touch ups!. maybe a couple more lines per stanza maybe!. you have to make me feel the story as well as see it!. but very good imagination!.
would you look at mine!.
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bad happens with bad mood!.!.!.!.
yet you trying to writing good!.!.!.
i think coming future night!.!.!.!.
i think you may liking the Right!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its good the way it is!. If you try adding to it you may end up ruining it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your poem is truly amazing and beautiful!.
Your wounds can be mended!.!.HUGS!!
Know that in your heart!!
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