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wrote it in March


"The Machine"

Clocks keep turning like cog wheels

Day and night are nothing but switches

The knobs and dials we tinker with all the day

Only chip our lives away

No one can live without their technology

Minds are slaves to clever creations

Devoting all they have to man-made innovation

Living for the machine!.

There was once a time when people dreamed

People wondered & wandered

Back when the veil was still there

The veil that once shielded us from time

The surrounding warmth has gone cold

Cold as the metal of the machine

We have digitized the veil away

Now becoming time's prey

But that machine will break one day

And so with all inside of me

I seek out sweet antiquity

And hope that I will never be

Part of the machine
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
this poem is so great, it makes me think! on a scale of 1 to 10 , 11! I really love your word choice, you are truly a wirter!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's pretty good!. Although it doesn't have much depth- the meaning of the poem is right there at the surface, it doesn't take much analyzing to figure out what you mean!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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