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Question: Poetry Critique please!?

Believe and fear of sin!.!.
Exhale and reach the stars!.!.
Open up and take it in,
The truth outside the bars!.

No absolution here to seek
Nor hell that lies below the feet!.
Disregard the lies they speak
And all the inscolate deceit!.

Now you're infinate! Invincible!.
While the followers are closed
To something that's invisible;
A life so juxtaposed!.

Ah the freedom! Spread your wings!
Fly above! Above them all!
When the last believer sings!.!.
About their rise and fall!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
An Atheist is his own God but unfortunately they are all mortal and don't have a lot to hope for!. They have no one to thank except blind accident!. If they don't recognise sin then there is no need for absolution!. I find the thoughts here going around in confusing circles!.
Sorry, you lost me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You really need to focus on Living and keep writing your poetry cuz you are pretty deep!. What is Atheists!?Www@QuestionHome@Com