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Question: A poem i am working on, help would be appreciated!?
sticks and stones may break my bones!.
they are yet still but small mercies, small mercies!.
The world is too big a kingdom,
And i am too small a man!.
But words, words can never hurt me

This castle is full of tyranny
Have we lost our sense of anarchy!?
Where did the roman-likes go!?
They went the way of the raven, apparently
"never more", "never more"!.

Must we not make haste in such desperate times!?
Must we not stand for what we know is right!?
What is peace!.
what is just!.
What is liberty!?

What is liberty!?
Have we forgotten!.!.!?
These questions go unanswered, ignored
Let me ask them again, or least I implore
Or is it truly nevermore!?

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Too many mixed messages are being sent through this poem, there is no solid foundation for your thoughts to build on!.

I feel as if you tried to hard to make this poem something it wasn't meant to be!.

This is how I would grade you:

Grammar: 5!.5/10
Form: 6!.5/10
Message: 6!.5/10
Originality: 6/10
Overall: 6!.13/10
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