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Question: IS MY POEM OKAY!?!?!? THIS ONES FOR MY SISTER!!?
i wrote this last week, but i didnt know if i should give it to her!.!.!.idk!.!.!.=D
If you are going to be rude plz dont read it!!!

born as one, yet as diverse as human kind
conjoined in our spines, our legs, our hearts
what made me strong, the person i am today
the thick scar running along the outskirts of my body
outlining my legs, my torso, lets not forget the incision near my heart
today we are sepparate
yet alike all the same
the slim chance at survival we were given
the odds were against us, our middle names say it all
my dear sister, the only one i trust, the one i love, i desire
entrapped in a wheelchair for the first four years of life
myself sent to physical therapy daily
in hopes of walking one day
the struggles i faced
the ridicule i raced
made me strong and able to hope today
my heart bleeds at the sight of hurt, harassment, or anger
my sisters eyes, the key to her soul
together we stand, our family never far away
today, we lead a seemingly normal life
despite from our heart conditions and dificulty walking long distances
our lives are similar to that of the average teenager
though our organ problems never far from our minds
i truly love my life, endangered at birth yet now free as a bird
no matter the beliefs of others
as Martin Luther preached, man must live a normal life
Like the Platonists tought, one chooses their own destiny
god creates you as a person, the outcome is reliant on you to decide
conjoined from the start
together we will leave
though not physically connected
our hearts will always touch



---god bless you annabelle, together we beat the odds, the 2% chance wehad at survival was enough to show the world our strengths, the challenges we faced only brought us closer, we entered the world as one, conjoined in the spine, legs, and heart, though we will leave as one, our heats will forever touch!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That was beautiful:) What an amazing story!! Despite the few spelling and grammatical errors, it had real depth: I liked how it rhymed occasionally and the references you made to Martin Luther and Plato, and the last two lines are a fantastic way to end it! I loved the line "endangered at birth yet now free as a bird", too!. She will love it!. Well done! I'd love to know what your middle names are!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good poem Con Grats =DWww@QuestionHome@Com