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Question: Is this poem okay!?!?!? PLZ ANSWER!!!!?
The Black Plague, a time of dominance after that of the dutch
the mere murmur of the name elicits so much
hundreds and thousands were killed from disease
the powerful harm was the cause of the tease
all aspects of the plaque contained toxins and such
to rid this the country was in a rush
a trecherous time of distress and mourn
the people were killed shortly after they were born
a glance at our world today reveals
the dispersal of the plaque, which no longer appeals
the population regained, the affects evaporated
cures and methods of prevention are found today, the old dissipated
our society allows for invention and creation
the black plague never did regain control over the nation
btw, this is for school so it doesnt have to be very good!.!.!.!.
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ahh! best friend it's great :] not very poemish but it's great :DWww@QuestionHome@Com
it was really good, poem wise, and history the way you tied the two together, very well, some parts could be tweaked a lil but for the most part its really good, and dont listen to that other stupid girl who said it was bad she doesnt know good if it hit her in the face, if i was your teacher id be impressed Www@QuestionHome@Com
o but it is very great
it deserves an 8 out of 8
the power gives out so much emotion
i bet at school itll start a big commotion
i could have never written anything like that
give urself a little pat
i like the last two lines the best
out of the rest
and last of all
id like to say
to answer ur question
it is more than okay!.!!
it really is!. ITS GREAT!!! no joke!.
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It's really good i would just change one thing and that is where it says
"cures and methods of prevention are found today" I would just say "cures are found today" because what you had before you couldn't really say in one breathe if you know what i mean!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I would keep in mind that poetry doesn't have to rhyme, if you are really interested in expanding your writing potential!. If you're just looking for an okay grade, you got it down pat! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
I THINK ITS AMAZING
i suggest making the 3rd to last sentence a little shorter it doesnt flow right
other than that i think its pretty goodWww@QuestionHome@Com
wow, yes, i really like it!
it has a good flow and good rhymes!.
answer mine!? http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index!?!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
AwesomenessWww@QuestionHome@Com
Sounds good to me you did a good job getting everything to ryme!. ;)Www@QuestionHome@Com
it will prolly get an a but if u were ever going to send it somewhere i would pay attention to ur rhymes they look a bit rushed :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
WHAOOOOOOOOOOO! THATS REALLY suckishWww@QuestionHome@Com
thats really good!. well done, you have such a rare talent there!. good luck!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i love your poem is cool!. It describe a lot about the black plague so it is good!. If I was your teacher i give you A :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
YES I LOVE IT DARLING ANCHOR
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Thats pretty good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
You'll probably get an A or A+Www@QuestionHome@Com
Yeah its cool!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
~OMG IT IS KEWL~Www@QuestionHome@Com
I really like itWww@QuestionHome@Com
I love it!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love itWww@QuestionHome@Com
hmmm it's okayWww@QuestionHome@Com
Well, I dont like it!.
But it will get an A anyway!.!.!.!.
(I'm a harsh critic!.!.!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Ha ha ha nice it's pretty good
Most would be worstWww@QuestionHome@Com
if its for history class yes
very dark
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Its ok!. I could never get my poems to rhyme Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow!.!.!. this says a lot
about your thought process but well put together!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its okWww@QuestionHome@Com
its good!Www@QuestionHome@Com
sounds good to meWww@QuestionHome@Com
cool I like it alotWww@QuestionHome@Com