I wrote this poem, any suggestions, comments, thoughts, anything?

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any way to make it better!. or just how it made you feel!. or anything!. thanks!

Tower

I am trapped in a tower
I put up these bricks to protect me
Every hate filled word- lay one down
Every bruise- lay one down
This towers so high I can’t escape
This tower is filled with hate

The tower surrounds me
I let no one it
They might hurt me, just like you did
I sit and stare at the walls made of hate
They stair me back right in the face

Slowly, slowly the memories fade
Bricks crumble one by one
The tower is down but I no longer trust
I let no one in, and I never come out

Those hate filled bricks lay at my feet
I see everything you have done to me
I am building a new tower, with a door and a window
But your bricks will always lay at my feet!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

That's!.!.!. breathtaking!.
It has a superb underlyng message!. It's actually really sad that this person's trust in others has been damaged sp deeply!.
"I let no one in and I never come out"- that's a marvelous, never-forget line!.
PLEASE, do the world a favor, and try to get your work out there because it is amazing!. I want to remember these lines forever!. I can really connect with them, and I think that a lot of people will be able to, too!.
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I LIKE IT!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i feel you girl friend, couldn't have said it better!Www@QuestionHome@Com