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Question: Please read my poem!?!?!?!? ill give 10 points!!?
im really upset right now so i just wrote this in like 10 minutes so if you mistakes its because of that!.!.!.

In this world there is only good and evil
The flames of hell and the bright a bliss of heaven
Yes the answer shouts out to me over and over
like waves crashing onto the cold world
which intoxicates the ocean
with the darken sand

Thoughts turn into answers
As I think what I am
The truth is im the evil one
The demon of darkness
For I have lived in the flames of hell
Just thriving to escape

Then as I wonder these halls
Of the castle of hell
Something flickers
Just was is this!?!?
My legs move on its own
Why am I chasing it!?!?!?

It something I have never seen
Something different
The opposite of my blood hatred castle
What is this!?!?

I finnaly catch up to this
I get scared to get close
It is white light
But not the same light
From the blacken flames

I cant explain this feeling
But it is opposite of loneliness
It is a warm feeling
Unlike these cold flames

I become hungry for this warmth
Im craving it more than anything
As a blood eyed raven craves to eat death!.

I nurture this warmth
This soft gentle light
I feed it, protect it
Never to leave it alone

It is a drug
Once you get a taste of it
There is no going back
You wont be able to set it free

Oh I wish there was a warning
Before I had a taste of this
I have been intoxicated with this light
And never being able to take its affects
Away

I need this light more than anything
Yes this light has been soaked into my flesh
It changes my form

I learn what a smile is
What a laugh and being happy was
The blood on my dress is faded
By the light bleaching my dress

But that awful day came
When you left my castle
I need the light more than anything
It is the first time I felt no loneness
But nothing lasts forever

Years go bye and I still crave this warmth
Yes I still stay by its side
Craving it, hungering for it
I need it
But it is fine on its own
It doesn’t need me to nurture it
The truth was it never did

I have found my answers
To this addiction I have
I am evil for I need this light
I am evil for this is what I lust
You cant do a wrong
For you are the Prince of heaven
And Im the Princess of hell!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It should be: 1!. and darkens the sand
2!. I wander these halls
3!. Just what is this
4!. It is something I've never seen
5!. I get too scared to get close
6!. It is a white light
7!. Never leave it alone
8!. The blood on my dress has faded

Awesome, I'll loved the comparisons, the poem was good except for those mistakes I pointed out by I would give it a good rating!. You should write poems more often!.
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Wow! I write stories and poems for my income right now, and I gotta tell you, this is amazing!!

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