I just would like to gain an insight of how others perceive poems and what their general thoughts are of the matter
here Are my Poems currently awaiting Criticism :D
In our Darkest hour:
"In the time our darkest hour you will hear a cry
you will hear the lies spew from the tormented souls
the hurt the pain the sins the lie the EVIL inside will fall far from
the burning sun
many will try to flee it's presence
but others will see there's no point to run
for the wind that howls shall be heard by all and soon
they will know that he comes for our very essence"
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AND
The Forgotten prayer
Many will follow in the steps of the past
never truly knowing what lies ahead
ooh and the pain and suffering of the millions
shall not sway them from their bed
You have died and shed your blood and tears oh lord
so as to save us from our sins,OH LORD THEY DO NOT SEE BECAUSE THEY ARE BLINDED
And so I say with A new found wisdom
Hear our plea across the new Horizon
Hear our plea with love intent
Hear our plea rise unto thee!
Hear our hopes and dreams abound lord
hear the cry of a newborn child
hear the air the breath we breathe lord
and hear our hearts open unto thee
They do not see the power and the Majesty
because they are in fearful uncerntainty
I am not a saint nor do i claim to see Lord
but one thing my heart , knows
is your ever PRESENT and loving grace
And so I say Hear our plea Oh Lord
hear our open hearts
Hear it loud across the new Horizon
and hear the heartfelt prayers Lord
And so I say with this new found wisdom
Let our voices be heard across the Horizon
and HEAR OUR SOULS COME ALIVE oh LORD
as it lifts HIGH above the heavens
know we love and treasure thee
Each in our own unique way
SO you know we Hear thee still today!
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