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Question: So what do you think of my poem opinions welcomed!?
will u be mine forever
forever is only a little while
can u imagine me
like i imagine you
the last moment before i fall asleep
i think of you
the last moment of my life
i will be thinking of you
and only you
every moment of the day
is you
you are my day
your my night
your my sun
im your moon
your the breath that exhales outta my lungs
your the blood that rushes through me
your my heart that pumps me life
you are the pulse that keeps its steady beat
its like i wake up every morning
an your the sunset that greets meWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
see i really liked this because when u read it, the poem just flows and it does not seem to have trouble with the format of the poem!.!. i say this because i also write poems too and sometimes people have trouble having it all tie at the end!.!.!.!. yep i think this is really good let me know if u r going to publicize thisWww@QuestionHome@Com
waking up every morning and your the sun set that greets me!?
It should be sun rise unless you meant sun set!.!.
You need to fix your spelling!.
you jump from concept to concept and that makes it hard to grasp your rhythm!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i like it!. i 'stuttered' a little bit at the beginning but then i got into the rhythm and understood it!. Your poem almost sounds like a song!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
ok, gonna give you honesty cause you need to hear it!. not that good!. its too simple, doesnt sound like you put much thought into it!.
Not hte worst thing ive heard either though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I really like that poem!
It is very sweet and calming!. It was descriptive and it flowed great!
It is honestly good enough to be published! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
OMG!!! i loved it!!!! You did an awesome job on this poem!!! I GIVE IT A 9 3/4 out of 10!!!! That WAS insane-good!! Keep up the awesome!!
From a fellow poet,
ZachWww@QuestionHome@Com
I agree with all three of the posters!. It could use some help (spelling and grammar) but all in all it's not bad!. Www@QuestionHome@Com