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Question: Sky my poetry please rate and be onest!?
I!. I am going to fly
Higher than the sky
Gone reach the star
To be there with you
II!. I miss you so
Why are you going there !?
Without me my love
I cannot succeed without you
III!. The sky is so beutiful
Because of you
I watch the sky
For you,for your smile
IV!. There is no love
Without your love
Race shall begin
I promise you that
V!. Wait for me there
We gone race from star to star
So please love wait for me in the sky
Open the gate for me!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
wow! a lot better than your last one i actually felt that one! your right it's not advanced but all poetry must start somewhere!. uhm one line however is a bit long so scooch it down and seperate it w/ a comma!.
i rate this 7 out of 10Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wow this is really nice =)
I especially love III!. It's so sweet!.
It's about someone who is dying, and the person is telling them to wait in the afterlife so they can be together, right!?
But yeah this is some nice poetry, the only irritating thing was when you wrote 'We gone race from star to star'!. You shouldn't put 'We gone' into a poem like this, it's not a rap song!.
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depends on your age!. The poem lacks complex metaphor, advanced rhyme scheme (as in not simple rhyme at the ends of the lines) or a developed meter!. This is good through middle school!. Highschool and on requires more advanced poetic tools!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
OK, but a bit boring!.
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its very niceWww@QuestionHome@Com
nice !.but nothing special in this one !.!.!. anyone can write these just from the songs they heardWww@QuestionHome@Com
niceWww@QuestionHome@Com
good one again has feelings but u need to work on the pronunciation to make it betterWww@QuestionHome@Com