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Question: What do you think of this poem!? The image of hell if based on a dream I had!.!?
Torn Worlds

Torn love letters in the doorway,
Bottles of wine beside the wall,
Is this how you live now!?
Cut into a world of cold thorns,
Music plays in the background,
But the songs are all sad,
No one comes to visit you,
You are the broken heart left to bleed,
Blood pumps to you so slowly,
But it doesn’t feed your needs,
And you had a love as strong as your faith,
But know both are buried,
In a coffin above your hate,
Sorrow sings a song, which you wrote down,
You regret it over till the words make no sense at all,
And how I wish I could come back to your arms,
But that mugger had a knife,
And I was gone forever from your world,
I wished I left you better letters,
To help you carry on,
But I am trapped in an afterlife, waiting for you to come,
But you shall never come here if you carry that hate,
You will be left at doorway of heavens gate,
Thrown into the underground,
And I shall watch your torture,
That for you to never to set eyes on me again,
So I wish I could warn you,
I hope life shall play you a better deal,
Or else,
I shall wait forever,
For a soul trapped within hells gate,
And I would water the garden in the middle of hell,
And see you every day,
But you shall never see my face,
I the keeper of the garden,
But I hope that shall never turn!.
Torn love letters at the doorway,
Bottles of wine beside the wall!.

By CrazygirlWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow!.!.!. that's totally amazing!.
It paints a very stimulating, emotional picture of what Hell may be like!.
If I were you, I would take this and go with it!. Work on it, revise it, even try to get it published!. It has really, really, really good potential if you ask me!.
I hope that you keep experimenting your hand at poetry, and as you said, song lyrics!. Perhaps you could try writing more of these dark poems, as you are very lovely at them!. I hope to read more of your work soon!!! Keep up the awesome work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it is totally awesome


it would make a good songWww@QuestionHome@Com

Very good!.!. descriptive and fluent, I like it!.!.!. I would keep that and revisit it to improve and refine it!.!. If it were mine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com