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Question: Poem for my Brother we lost to suicide!. What do you think!?
I write a love letter in the sand

Never to be read, to your heart from my hand

So many things left to say

The end of time got in our way

I cry tears I can not hide

I tell others I'm better but I've lied

I want you to be here with me

But I know now it can never be

You chose to leave thats what hurts the most

No, its that now your gone,

Just a memory just a ghost

I close my eyes and dream you're near

I hold my breath and can feel you here

Everywhere I look I can see your face

You are a memory I would not erase

I miss joy, peace,and sometimes being glad

I'm so tired of hurting, pain and feeling so sad

I have changed, I'm no longer me

And this I fear, is forever how it will be

I write you love letters everyday in my head

Though I know now they can never be read

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Coping With Death:
Going through pain like you are is
something a person will experience
in their life!.
This is very difficult,
It is especially true if its someone special
You are crying this is nothing to be ashamed of
There is so much heartache often its painful!.
You brother must have been someone thoughtful
You will not forget him, and he will be in your heart!.
The emotions are very real
don't rush your grief
Going through something like this takes time to heal
if it should ever!.
Just let out those tears
Never mind worrying what other people think
however people grieve in different ways!.
There is no set length of time to grieve
or right or wrong way either!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is beautiful, and i'm so sorry for your loss!.
this has true emotion and it and it sounds lovely!.
however, Just a memory just a ghost sounds awkward because of the two just's!. think about changing one of the wordsWww@QuestionHome@Com

Interesting, maybe you can use something like

The sun in my window shines, but there is no warmth!.

hehe,, i love it! very deep! =) i hope you can still move on!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is a really pretty poem! I love your rhyme, and it flows well!. I'm sorry, and I wish I knew what you were going through, but I don't!. Take care!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its a beautiful poem,I can feel your pain!.I'm sorry for your loss!.Nothing I say will make you feel better!.So just be strong!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It was predictable!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

that was amazing! I'm crying right now, it's so beautiful! amazing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very heartfelt poem!. Very good!. Your words and ryme are from your heart!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow, this is amazing! It's beautiful, and I can feel your pain!.
I love this!.
I'm so sorry for your loss!.
xWww@QuestionHome@Com

it sounds very dark!!!!!!!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was great!. It must be hard for you right now Www@QuestionHome@Com

Poem sucks, I'm sure your brother is worth more than this!.

All due condolences!.!.!. Www@QuestionHome@Com