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Question: What do you think of this little poem!? !?
it had to be when wed be our happiest and to be honest i wanted to do it simply for change from all the crafted words and stuff!. i just wanted opinions, i know its nothing special, but i wanted to just see, i don't normally write like this at all!.!.!.but its an assignment and yeah just wanted opinions, thank you

i think i'll be my happiest
at 83,
when i can drink tea all day
and play with my old cameras
and have Beautiful white hair
and possibly have my husband
of 50 or so years
or who knows,
a wife
and do my laundry on monday mornings
after my weekly perm
and change the hearing aid batteries
once a week
and get new £60 glasses
that barely help me see
i think i'll be my happiest
waking up at 4 am
after a good nights sleep
from 8 pm
the night before
i think i'll be my happiest
with all my memoriesWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Great and original idea, I really like it!. I so really like the little factual things!. The style and structure aren't really poetic, but I think you didn't really wanted that, its nice prosaic as is!. However, if after the changing of batteries you would insert another little thing you would do regularly, that would improve the poem further!.
Well done, and write some more if you can!.Www@QuestionHome@Com