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Question: What do you think of invention of a new sonnet form!?

For lo! The forty four grey cast away
Fetters, mooring!. Roaring past the old quay!.
Flying, fleeing, sighing with unknown day
Far ahead!. Frenzied eyes watched for the way

Showing the Way, rowing towards the far West,
Sunned with gulls, fecund with mountainous crests!.
Slowing, rowers graveing ill with tiredness!.
Shallow hope, fallow horizons' cruel test!.

Then, with men exhausted, starving, the call!
That tiny branch floating briny waves tall!
The mens' eyes gleamed, streamed!. New land welcomed all!
Tears amongst cheers, from Fathers in their Hall!

Voyagers of Old! Stories told this night!
Valhalla tested!.!.!.not bested!. Lands' sight! Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Yours is a tough form with end and internal rhyme plus the letter requirement start on each stanza!. Great story!. As to calling it asean, my quick search found no reference!. This is an Elyslund sonnet! Well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

What is it with you and those Viking men!?

I like this sonnet form!.!.!.!.and you do them so well!.

I am going to cheat and repost my earlier Sonnet which conforms to your invention!. As having done one!.!.!.I don't think I could face another!.
Too much like hard work!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Agreeing with neon, I don't know how you do it!. Four end rhymes in a quatrain plus internal rhymes and yet you have avoided sounding rhymey!. I'm not sure that "briny waves tall" quite gets it!. Maybe it's just me this morning!. Another great one!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I thought that it would be easier to pin-point what techniques this didn't employ, but I'm not having any luck with that!.

Not that my opinion matters, but; in my opinion this is awesome!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ah, the Elyslundian Sonnet!. Still a lovely creation that I must try as soon as I am out of my slump!. Beautifully wrought!. I love the sound and imagery of it!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Don't ask the kitty to critique the mechanics of it all!. I just knows what I like, and I like!. Besides, kitties can't read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

FSTV!.!.!.what does that mean!.!.!.
Good one!.!.
you're learning the alphabet!.!.I bet!.

An
Apple
A day
Anyway

Because they taste good
But too many
Becomes a
Big tummy ache!.

He he he!.!.
I can do it too!.!.!.!.!.!.

Very Unique style!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I agree to what Neonman said, except for naming this new form!. I'd call it "Valhallan" Sonnet form!? as a tribute to this sonnet!.
Enjoyable read!Www@QuestionHome@Com

FSTV, poetic license for festive, everyone knows that!. Next project, rhyme all 14 lines!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice form invention!. Looks good!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

It is called an Asean sonnet!. Nothing new under the sun!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well done!. Clever use of words beginning with the same letters!. Does not seem forced for all that !. Amazing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I am keen on Sidney!.
He's a writer of my kidney!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I might quit my day job!. What I do ain't nothing like this!. Were to busy destroying to "find " anything!.Www@QuestionHome@Com