How would you improve these song lyrics?

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Question:

"Hello" by Lionel Richie

I've been alone with you inside my mind
And in my dreams I've kissed your lips,
A thousand times!.
I sometimes see you pass outside my door!.

Hello, Is it me you're lookin' for!?
I can see it in your eyes!.
I can see it in your smile!.
You're all I've' ever wanted,
And my arms are open wide!.
'Cause you know just what to say,
And you know just what to do!.
And I want to tell you so much,
"I love you!."

I long to see the sunlight in you hair!.
And tell you time and time again,
How much I care!.
Sometimes I feel my heart will overflow!.

Hello, I've just got to let you know,
'Cause I wonder where you are
And I wonder what you do!.
Are you somewhere feeling lonely,
Or is someone loving you!?
Tell me how to win your heart,
For I haven't got a clue!.
But let me start by saying,
"I love you!."

Seriously, come up with another verse or rewrite one that is there, I'd like to see how you could improve on it! Give it a try!.!.!.personally, I love it as it is!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Can't improve on these!.!.!.!.although I always hated that stupid video!

So, just because I cannot resist a challenge!.!.!.!.here is one more verse and chorus!.

I imagine how your sweet touch would feel!.
My lost soul burns with such desire
I am consumed!.
Yet still I dare not even reach for you

Hello, (Please, God tell me what to do)
I'm lost outside your arms
I'm lost without your kiss
I'm stumbling in the darkness
'Cos your hand I always miss
You see, my wants are few
I just need to let you know
"I love you"

Well, we can't all be Lionel Ritchie!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its okay I suppose!.!.But its the type of song you really have to like !.!.
Could'nt sleep but trying again !.!.!.heeheeWww@QuestionHome@Com

That's cool, but where is the blind chick from the video!?!?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

classic!.!.I love you too maWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like it the way it is!. No changing here!. Love honeyWww@QuestionHome@Com

This one and Easy Like Sunday Morning are my favourite shower songs!. My poor attempt:

My heart beats out of time when you are near
Echoes of the way I feel

Love, can you hear!?

My trembling soul just needs to hold you so

Hello, I just hope by now you know
'Cause deep inside my dreams
A reality that’s new
You’ve stopped me feeling lonely,
I’m no longer feeling blue
Been afraid right from the start
But I’m sure what I must do!.
Let you know by saying,
"I love you!."Www@QuestionHome@Com