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Question: Honest opinions on this poem!?
(i have asked before i just want to see if i get more answers)

please tell me things to fix, error(and for idiots you don't need capitals or punctuation in poetry)and honest opinions on it:

he lays there on the dark November night
lying behind the couch on the flush wooden floor
the midnight fur blends in with the dim night
he get in his pouncing position as hushed as a mouse
he looks out for his sister to pass by the couch
he see her stroll across the room
patiently, he sits perfectly still waiting for the perfect striking time
after a blink of an eye, he springs from his hiding spot
his claws as sharp as a vampires fangs
his teeth look like scorpion stingers
fighting for his life like a black bear would fight for territory
he pierces his teeth into her neck
kicks furiously with his dagger like claws
he calms himself, I pet him wondering,
that is my suspicious, lunatic cat
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
great irony! i just think u should use "it " instead of "he"tho!. i liked it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com