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Question: Rate my poetry please!!!!!! I think its quite good!!! !?
Summers Night!.

Wen the night was still young,
and the warm Summer's breeze wandering
through the air,

When the night was still innocent,
and the winds carrying the fallen leaves
to nowhere,

When the night was still a mystery,
it was the Winter's gale that could travel no further!.

for it was cold,
its mind guilty,
and for it was no longer
the warm breeze of the young and innocent,
Summer's Night!.

Thats it!!!!! Rate it out of 10 please!. Im only in year 9 so i can take harsh words so dont be tooo kind!.

also, in stanza 3, line 2, ( Winter's gale ) What can i change that to!?!?!? ( Autume drought!? )
Need few ideas and tips on that please,
And any other few ideas and tips would be still welcome!Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
7/10

Enjoyable poem!. For some reason I just don't like the word 'wondering' there!.!.!. i think a two syllable word would sound better!. But I'm no expert!

"for it was cold" Very effective short line with great impact welldone!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ok, first of all, the first word is "When" not "Wen", and im pretty sure that every new line has to start with a capitol letter!.!.!.

i cant think of anything else that would replace Winters Gale!.!.!. i think its ok!.!.!.

Other than that, i would rate it 8 out of 10!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i thought it was average and the other answerer (not the girl) answer is a retard, in poetry you don't need capitals or punctuation it doesn't even have to make sinceWww@QuestionHome@Com