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Question: Can you read my poem and tel me what you think !?
look into my eyes
and you'll see
the tears i try to hide
from all the pain , rejection and disappointment
i try to do my best
but my best just ain't enough
so tell me what to do !.!.
tell me what to say!.!.
cause im about to give up
words can't explain
all the pain
that i hide behind my smile
many disappointments
i just can't ever seem to get it right
if you were smart enough
you'll look beyond my eyes , my smile , my laugh ,
and see a little girl inside of me
just waiting to be break free
and be the girl that she's always wanted to be


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Well, it's good!. Lots of heartache!. One rule about poetry is it needs to flow evenly!.
also I seen a few spots you might want to replace!.

Look into my eyes
And you will see
The tears I try to hide

and another line I'd fix would be!.!.!.

But my best just isn't good enough


that's a few suggestions from me!.
I'm a poetry writer, almost pro!. but this is just my opinion!. I hope I could help!.
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I think it is pretty good of a poem
something i would change to make it seem more serious and better and sweeter is to change "but my best just aint enough" to "but my best just isnt enough" or "but my best will never be enough" :)
Other than that i love itWww@QuestionHome@Com