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Question: Heyy can you read my poem!?
lost in space
i feel so out of place
so many people around me
but i feel so lonely
a girl with low- self esteem
doesn't feel pretty
struggles with insecurities
acceptance
and faith
a girl trying to please everyone
and anyone
but seems to fail
she tries SO hard
and no one cares
one day your gonna wake up
and she isn't their !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
typo, typo, typo!.
that put me in a mood, but it isn't really original !.!. don't like the idea, because it's depressing, but sure!. you got it!. but dudette - POETRY IS A GAME; a game between the author and reader!. you are trying to conceal what your message is!. you have to find out a way to say what you want to say, in a way that nobody has said it before!. happy writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
it was all right!.!.!.I mean!.!.!.it seemed kind of amaturish if you ask me!.!.!.but it was a great start!. I feel this poem has great potential to be even better!.!.perhaps put more feeling into it!.!.!.then again im not a girl so I would not be able to really relate fully to this poem but in general!.!.!.I would give it a 6-10!.!.!.good luck !Www@QuestionHome@Com
You have a few typos in the last line you used the wrong "their" you should use There!.
You should try and find a rhythm you seem to be bouncing from one to another!.
Try again you have potential :]
Can you judge mine!? It's über long but please read it :]
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it's great! =]
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thats exactly how i feel right now!.!.i've been feeling this way for awhile now and you just described everything!.!.wow!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow that is awesomeWww@QuestionHome@Com
good job :DWww@QuestionHome@Com
Thats really good!. I <3 it a lot! Www@QuestionHome@Com
thats good!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I LOVE IT !!! that use to be me back in the day, but its awesomeWww@QuestionHome@Com