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Question: Poetry: It comes!. Will you rate this on a 1 to 10 scale for me please!?
It comes to take over me, bubbling up inside,
I can not run, there is no way to hide!.
Its iron grip takes hold of my heart,
Squeezing out any hope before it can start!.
A faint voice calls to me “Where there’s a will there’s a way”,
But there is nothing I can do and nothing I can say!.
It reaches to my throat, choking out all life,
The edges of my mind is the end of its plight,
As I push back the darkness and search for the light!.
Although it is just a shimmer, a ripple in the night,
I long for the morning, and the end of this fight!.
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hi im not quite sure what the subject is but ill give you a 7!.5 as i think line 4 "Squeezing out any hope befor it can start" iam not sure what (it) is!. also line 6 to me sounds a bit better if it were (but there is nothing i can do or say) but keep up the good workWww@QuestionHome@Com
pretty much AWESOME!. the only thing i can think of to help is that the beginnings a bit awkward, but otheer than that i love it!Www@QuestionHome@Com
9!.5Www@QuestionHome@Com
8- it was pretty good!!! GREAT JOB! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
it was goodWww@QuestionHome@Com