Comment another poem?

Question: Comment another poem!?

The young girl sat alone
In a small, dark room
She had learnt to call home

In the bed her teddy layed
Without a head
Since she got raged

The child had never seen real daylight
If she had one wish
It would be to go outside

That was all three years ago
But still the child is scared
Of the parents that said they loved her
And locked her up under the stairsWww@QuestionHome@Com

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Really good!
You should post it at:
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I see in your poem
that a young girl
has never been outside
There must be a fairy
in this because if she had one wish
I would hardly think that
locking someone under the stairs
is showing any love!.
I can also see she has never been to bed
because her teddy was lonely!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The poem doesn't really have any depth!. The first few lines get you ready for a story, then leaves you disappointed with a few random lines ("she got raged" doesn't even make sense!)!.

It could have potential if you're willing to expand upon it!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

It pretty much sucks!. Sorry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

the plot seems great, it just needs a little more!.!.!.!.!. description I guess!.!.!.but I like it!Www@QuestionHome@Com