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Question: How is my poem coming along!?
It's not done and I'll probably change it later, too!. But I want to know know what your opinions about it are so far!.

Secrets in the dark of night!.
The dawn won't tell, in the morning light!.
Nor, will she;
That courardly fright!.

Oh, look
how beautiful she is!.
She's found true love
in her living hell!.

A prince of rescue!.
A knight of hope!.
To slay the dragon and help her through!.
Hold her dear!.

Oh, look
how crazy she is!.
A voice in her mind;
Keeping her quiet!.

An unrational thought suicide
lingers through her thoughts inside!.
Those pills can help her die!.
Scared and alone she cries!.

She wrights that grusome letter,
that's always left when someone tries to feel better!.
Just in case there's not another tomorrow
to suffer!.

She doesn't want to die!.
Just keep that in mind!.
It's a voice telling her;
controlling her!.

She'll be left behind;
Miss out on life!.
Help her!.!.
It's starting to become too late!.



That's it so far!. I'm not sure if I like it so I'll probably change it!. But what do you think of my start!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
May I help you with your spelling!?
Courardly - cowardly
unrational - irrational
wrights - writes
grusome - gruesome

Not the kind of poem I care for!.!.!.!.but, having read quite a few like this I would say you've done a good job here!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sad and alone she does now feel,
Death is the end, truly real!.
To take her last breath, to late!.
She will not let this be her fate!.

To see the sun rise, to stay alive,
She will live today to always thrive!.
She thinks of who she will hurt!.
Dark, six feet under in the dirt!.

Thinking of herself, her mind takes a turn!.
Taking a stand she yells, "I WILL BE STERN !"
Death will not take me, I'm going to live!.
I have so much to live for, so much to give!.
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It's good I like it!.

Is she gonna do it or not!?!!?!!?

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