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Question: Can you revise my poem!? !?
Wedding Day in Paris

The wedding day in Paris is so special for me
(If that will happen to me)
But in my dream, what I describe the wedding day in Paris:

There was an exciting event of my wedding day in Paris!
My family and my friends were so exciting to go!
And so do Arnuad, my fiance's people

There were one thousand people attended to the wedding speech
How many bridesmaid!? Ten!
The beautiful quiet music began to march
Arnuad was with his beautiful mother
Next, the little girl was with the little boy
Next, the bridesmaid was with men
And then me was with my cute papa

Now, the wedding speech begins:
(Will post soon)

Wow, what a beautiful wedding speech!
I'm sure that my people and Arnuad's people enjoyed watching our speech
Plus, they were so happy about that
The wedding speech were a lovely chat

After the wedding speech,
A wedding photographer took a lot pictures of me and Arnuad around the popular Eiffel Tower
also, the beautiful white roses around the bushes too

Then at the wedding party time
Five hundred people were dancing around
And others were sitting and watching them
The introduction song called!.!.!.began to sing by!.!.!.

Then me was reading a poem called!.!.!.
That poem was written by!.!.!.
That poem was beautiful

Everyone were enjoying eating Spanish /French cuisine buffet
And were dancing until end of the wedding party time!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I do not revise another writers work!.

I give suggestions and critiques!.

Only YOU can revise your own work, for if others did it, it no longer belongs to you!.

Sam


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In Paris in the morning,
the wedding bells told tales,
in Paris in the morning,
Le tour eiffel est belle,
the speech was short but lovely,
arnaud and i could cry,
small roses round the bushes,
at the marriage of Arnaud and I!.Www@QuestionHome@Com