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Question: Doesn't this poem suck O!.o!?
I Could Never Be Enough For You
I could never be beautiful enough for you to behold
I could never speak words sweet enough unto your ears to be told!.
I could never be soft enough to endure your touch!.
I could never be worthy enough to accept your love so much!.
I'm a stain on society too dirty to wash away!.
I'm too useless for you to throw on me your feelings away!.
It's pointless, it's useless for me to try to even convey,
my feelings for you, how you make me feel each day!.
I love you I hope you know this much is true,
but never in this lifetime will there be the words to express how much I value and love you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Don't be so hard on yourself!. Here, let me be hard on you!.!.!.hehehe
First off, the double-spacing is maddening for PC poetry!. The other bad part is the theme!. Everybody feels this way once in a while!. You have delivered us to ordinary and mundane!.!.!.
Now, the good news!. You have poetic skills!. Your rhymes are not hard or clunky, they flow very nicely, partly because they are exactly correct in syntax (word usage!.) You are also a good storyteller!. The reader has no problem moving along with you!.
OK, you can write!. Now, get out there and read!. Great poets rarely ever tell us a reality (unless they're a realist, like Robert Frost!.) Go to the Library and find Edna Millay and TS Eliot, Shel Silverstein and Ogden Nash gathering dust on shelf!. They are waiting there for you!.
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I think it's a bit!.!.!. sad!. Nevertheless, I really don't think it plainly sucks!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
ok!.!. its uh!.!.!.differentWww@QuestionHome@Com
If it sucked, you wouldn't be sharing it with us!. (:
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