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Position:Home>Poetry> What of a reveal, poetically speaking?Question: What of a reveal, poetically speaking!? Sometimes I am wild!.
There is something in me maybe spider senses maybe a dream!. It tickles, then itches then starts to scream!. You see, I have no ego I am down on my knees!. Saying only to please!!? Oh no, not me! I don't get along, or play well with others, I find feathers and keep them give no wishes to others!. Vulnerable is not settling right I build a web and pull the strings tight!. I could go on for ever, and not see the light It isn't you babe It's me!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: You forgot to mention the silky touch of feathers since we all like the feel of silk and took the sappy babe thing away and replaced it with foetus but I will let you off my web I seek something less hairy on the head!. Www@QuestionHome@Com It's all about lines 7, 8, 9, and especially 11 and 14 and 15!. This is not really a poem as good as it is as a poem!. it is a confession and it's about 11 and 14!. Lines 13 and 16 and 17 is just not true!. You are a beautiful, artistic, caring and loving human being!. Extremely sensitive and vulnerable right now, but the strings will loosen in time!. Keep those plants alive!. Thumbs down, I don't think so!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I dig it!. Well done!. The only line that doesn't make sense to me is "Saying only to please!!?" Otherwise it's real cool!. I really dig the lines "There is something in me/ maybe spider senses/ maybe a dream!."Www@QuestionHome@Com You did reveal a very strong person who at times needs to be by herself!. I liked the free flow nature of this!. 'not see the light' is a cliche that easily could be reworded!. Overall, well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Honestly!.!.!.I like this very much except for the last two lines!.!.too cliched!.!.!. just drop em! Besides, Bob Dylan disagrees, and already illustrated this when he pointed out!.!.!.!. "It Ain't Me Babe, I said a no no no"Www@QuestionHome@Com Don't ever get on your knees to please another!.!.!. Then, and I swear to the above sovereign, you will be famous!.!.!. And not in a good way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Vision in tangled thoughts Turned and tossed over Sifted for service Silk threads connect the knotsWww@QuestionHome@Com Lovely Ronnie do you do rap as well!? You do!? then why do you not wrap up!? Three questions!. Give me 6 points!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |