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Question: Poem I wrote what do you think!?!?!?
A loss for words to much to say

But lonliness and heartache stand in the way

I want I want to scream and weep for us all

But I only beat at a cold brick wall

We sit surrounded by both friends and foe

Surrounded by so many full of woe

Dont leave me alone, it should be easy to say

But our fear stands in the way

Whats to keep us from both living and dying alone

What keeps us from feeling like nowhere is home

We can't give up, we can't give in

We can't let the evils of this life win

I fall in defeat and stand in despair

And yet I'm surrounded by those who care

Who is beside you up till the end

It is the one who stands as your last friend

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i think its beautiful!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think this poem is amazing but the messages are shattered, and do not cohere!. I think you have a great writing ability, but your overly caring, and should limit your presentation of ideas in just a single poem; spread them out!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

maybe you could do a bit more editing to see if it makes sence but its still brilliantWww@QuestionHome@Com

too longWww@QuestionHome@Com