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Question: What yo you think of my poem!.!.lol!?
I feel kind of gay about writing poems i usually just write songs for my band but i was looking through my highschool stuff and found this poem i wrote my x-girlfriend who couldnt get over this guy she went out with who took her virginity then left her!. I went out with her right after i got out of a 2 year relationship and she was the reason i got by

tell me what you think!.!.please dont comment negatively


" He took a peice of your heart i know i cant replace, and a feeling of belonging, is met when you see his face!. The tears you cry are from unanswered questions, about what he's done and why, theres no use in saying your over him, when we both no thats a lie

She took a peice of my heart, i hoped you would replace, and my lonelyness subsided, when i saw your face!. the tears ive cried i cry no more, you helped me to get by, now i can say im over her, and know its not a lie

so weve both had complications, a past you cannot part, and i cant make your care for me, without the keys too your heart, so farewell love for now, i know its all confusing, i hope your heart has mercy, from all that caused it bruising!. But better days are yet to come, beleive me you'll be fine, one day i know well be together, when you leave the past behindWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I will comment constructively not negatively!. It reads like a letter even when one separates the lines into poetry!. I liked the first part, the middle part and the first half of the last paragraph and that's it!. Good luck to you and your band!. Many happy returns!.Www@QuestionHome@Com