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Question: Please Don't Give Up - my poem, what do you think!?
It started with a marker
I was bored in Math class
I was drawing on my fingertips
With a red marker
It looked like blood

So I drew a cut on my hand
It looked like blood
I drew some more
On my wrist
It looked and seemed real

But I became afraid
Why did I draw it!?
Is there a reason!?
I hid it under my shirt
Those who saw it was by accident

I started to wonder
How does it feel
When it's real!?
How much are you afraid!?
How much more do you hide it!?

But there must be hurt
To cause this pain
And fear
I don't want to feel the real thing
It scares me so

Please don't do it
The hurt and fear will
Only destroy you
Tell someone and please
Put your knife away

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i disagree with the people who said that this poem was bad!. it was really good actually!. i liked it, Www@QuestionHome@Com

dont like it!.
good point tho!.
work on it!
looking forward to the fixed version! =]
dejamarie!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow, that is very touching and deep!. I think it is very beautiful though!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. It would probably be better if it ryhmed in every line!. No offense, or anything!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Depressing!.!.But good!. It has a message to it, and that's what counts!. :) Good job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i dont like it!.

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