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Question: Feedback on my prose/poem ^_^!?
We are like gardens
We can be beautiful
Yet so fragile
We need help
To thrive and grow
We can reach for the sky
Or stay where we are
We all have flaws
Those pesky weeds
But we all have flowers
The most beautiful part of all

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You don't need help with this poem!!! Beautiful metaphor, the garden, flowers!.!.!.!.you have the meaning down pat!
Just a few unnessary words to take out and this poem will shine even brighter!!! True! But, is fine the way you have written it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Our flowers are weak,if they don't get love they will die!.
We need protection, we need warmth!.
We can be beautiful and we can look bad!.
We can be happy or sad!.
We have good days and bad!.

There's one thing that happens with real flowers and not with us!.
Flowers get trowed away we don't!.

Another poem for you :-) !!Www@QuestionHome@Com

has a nice message
nice comparison of life and a garden
I have doubt in the grammar of the first line!.!.!.
maybe it should be "We're like a garden"
well its just a suggestion though!.!.!.
It has a nice message of looking at the brighter things in life!.!.!.
NIce ang poisitve!
Cheery and fresh!
Keep it up!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think the best lines of the poem are:

We can reach for the sky
Or stay where we are
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No critism!.!.!.!.!.!.!.I like your poem !.

Simple and yet deep!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Stands as is!.!.!.

Good job!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's a poem ^-^ and good too!.

I like how you used a free verse instead of the typical rhymes!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

LameWww@QuestionHome@Com

pretty goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

THAT IS AWSOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i like itWww@QuestionHome@Com

I loves it!.!.!.!.
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