I simmer in a hot pot
crock pot
shock pot
It's a heated hot pot
Meat stalk
Meat stalk
All my mem'ries forgot
hot pot
crock pot
I simmer to my last lot
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Position:Home>Poetry> HELP: Do you like my poem?Question: HELP: Do you like my poem!? I simmer in a hot pot
crock pot shock pot It's a heated hot pot Meat stalk Meat stalk All my mem'ries forgot hot pot crock pot I simmer to my last lot Forgot ForgotWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: good good a lot!. what do you think of mine please!? She walks I stare I look down then I stare I look down then I stare look at her long hair look at her pretty face I can't lower my gaze ok I think I can look away nope I can't lower my gaze she has just the right height she has just the right laugh but I can't lower my gaze she has just the right smile I think it will be a while I'm glad the cat has my tongue I'm glad I don't say much words another sin will be hung I'm glad I have the right nerves I can't lower my gaze she says I'm so serious but she can't see my inside I think I'm focused at work or its my shyness I hide Did I lower my gaze its my feelings I hide my attraction I hide I just can't go for this ride how can I lower my gaze I have enough on my plate that I might get hung for but that's a part of my fate I want to lower my gaze I may control it some more but i will see her again and when she comes through the door i even feel my heart grin and when she calls me my name I feel so happy inside but the reality is she cannot be my wife and this is just how it goes I guess I have to move on yet, I'm depressed and lonely I guess I have to stay strong but you're a beautiful thing I see the things you've been through and you make my bells ring I getting so into you and before this poem ends just let me say a few words i have to say it again you are a beeeeaaaaautifuuuul giiiiiiirl!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com I like the rhythm, but it needs more substance, perhaps lengthen it and add more depth !? I like it a lot though!. http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Sounds like something from that movie, "Malibu's Most Wanted", and that's not good!. = (Www@QuestionHome@Com pretty good!. not my style but for some that is awsome!Www@QuestionHome@Com |