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Question: HELP: Do you like my poem!?
I simmer in a hot pot
crock pot
shock pot
It's a heated hot pot
Meat stalk
Meat stalk
All my mem'ries forgot
hot pot
crock pot
I simmer to my last lot
Forgot
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
good good a lot!.
what do you think of mine please!?

She walks
I stare
I look down then I stare
I look down then I stare
look at her long hair
look at her pretty face
I can't lower my gaze
ok I think I can look away
nope I can't lower my gaze
she has just the right height
she has just the right laugh
but I can't lower my gaze
she has just the right smile
I think it will be a while
I'm glad the cat has my tongue
I'm glad I don't say much words
another sin will be hung
I'm glad I have the right nerves
I can't lower my gaze
she says I'm so serious
but she can't see my inside
I think I'm focused at work
or its my shyness I hide
Did I lower my gaze
its my feelings I hide
my attraction I hide
I just can't go for this ride
how can I lower my gaze
I have enough on my plate
that I might get hung for
but that's a part of my fate
I want to lower my gaze
I may control it some more
but i will see her again
and when she comes through the door
i even feel my heart grin
and when she calls me my name
I feel so happy inside
but the reality is
she cannot be my wife
and this is just how it goes
I guess I have to move on
yet, I'm depressed and lonely
I guess I have to stay strong
but you're a beautiful thing
I see the things you've been through
and you make my bells ring
I getting so into you
and before this poem ends
just let me say a few words
i have to say it again
you are a beeeeaaaaautifuuuul giiiiiiirl!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like the rhythm, but it needs more substance, perhaps lengthen it and add more depth !?

I like it a lot though!.



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Sounds like something from that movie, "Malibu's Most Wanted", and that's not good!. = (Www@QuestionHome@Com

pretty good!.

not my style but for some that is awsome!Www@QuestionHome@Com