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Question: Another spur of the moment poem!?
She walks
I stare
I look down then I stare
I look down then I stare
look at her long hair
look at her pretty face
I can't lower my gaze
ok I think I can look away
nope I can't lower my gaze
she has just the right height
she has just the right laugh
she has just the right smile
I think it will be a while
I'm glad the cat has my tung
I'm glad I don't say much words
another sin will be hung
I'm glad I have the right nerves
she says I'm so serious
but she can't see my inside
I think I'm focused at work
or its my shyness I hide
its my feelings I hide
my atttraction I hide
I just can't go for this ride
I have enough in my case
that I might get hung for
but thats a part of my fate
I may control it some more!.!.!.

sorry!.!.I could'nt finish!.!.I have to sit down and think this one out!. But what do you think of what I have so far!?


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
not bad pretty good!.!.!.!.do u rap!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

think it out then if that is what works best for you!. but I wonder if you might try simply jotting down words that you wish to associate with this poem in quick succession!.!.!.then go back to that list of words and marshal them into a semblance of what you mean to say!. refining as you proceed!. Either way you should continue!. :-)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Tongue, not tung!.
It's good, but seems creepy a little bit!.Www@QuestionHome@Com