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I just wrote a poem what do you think of it!?!?!?!?
The sound of the gun is dead
The sound of your heart fled
The sound of the voices in your head
Cried and lied next to your bed
The sound of your mothers voice
The sound of your fathers choice
The sound of the wrong decision
The sound of tears and regret listen
The sound of cold
The sound of hold
The sound of goodbye
Left you to die!.
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haha thats awesomeWww@QuestionHome@Com
SOME repetition is ok!. But you have way too much with "the sound!.!.!."!. Try to start your lines differently at some point besides the fourth line!.
And "hold" cannot make a sound and the "wrong decision" cannot make a sound!. Try to use more technical terms and ideas!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I wish people who wrote poems could tell us what they intend with the poem!.
Are you trying to convey a feeling!? If you are it's lost to me!.
Is there some morale or hidden message!? I guess there could be, but it's just so much gibberish!.
I'll give it a 2!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I hope I don't read another one if I need instructions!! But it could work!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
reminds me of what my ex did to me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i gonna give u 4star!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com