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Position:Home>Poetry> Addendum to Foggisan:...What of a poem about bare necesiities?Question: Addendum to Foggisan:!.!.!.What of a poem about bare necesiities!? Stripped She likes the money So she says But the lechers don't care about that They want to leer at her Salivating at the unattainable Pennies to them survival to her Tossed about on this stage of reduction Shelling out her soul Yelling out the whole time No one hears her She’s dismissed and not missed Until the pennies gather again to entice This gluttonous vice never quelled Take it all off As light comes her head falls She crawls to her cave To the pennies a slave Looking down in the mirror Clouds now become clearer The price of the pennies She's spent ?rad081808 Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I can feel the grime on her soul, the salt welling in the eyes!. A fine poem, HydroWww@QuestionHome@Com This is elegant, and I wonder how it can be so!. Every word you use is necessary, nothing is wasted!. The scene, the sounds, the images that crossed my eyes as I read your words gave me great sorrow for the girl who strips for survival and puts up with the clammy hands!. The is perfection!. Salivating at the unattainable Pennies to them survival to her Tossed about on this stage of reduction !.!.!. As light comes her head falls She crawls to her cave To the pennies a slave Looking down in the mirror Clouds now become clearer The price of the pennies She's spent T!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Bare, maybe, bare in soul, bare in body for the silver for the gold never knwoing her soul's been sold the price of life price of strife, let there be!.!.!.freedom, no chains, no metal, no money, no slaves!.Www@QuestionHome@Com My 'neccessities' are 'bare' and 'barely' there at all!.!.!.heheheheheheheeeeeeeee!.!.!.!.penny for my thoughts!? HA! got money!? Naughty girl!.!.!.SLAP!!!! I'm finished now!. Www@QuestionHome@Com So that's where you went you first night back on the job! Most folks scorn, you have have a tender heart!. Www@QuestionHome@Com ditto the ladies above me!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com ET took the words right out of my mouth, well, not really, they were never there but MAN I wish they HAD been! No one else need answer! maWww@QuestionHome@Com Oh, dung beetles!.Www@QuestionHome@Com hard hitterWww@QuestionHome@Com |