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1st Cup Eyes See

Deep sea sounds
Drown yesterday
Fathoms blue revive me

East breaks the day
The moment pristine
Peaceful eyes see

Damn, this a good cup



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The last line is the best line! It's short & sweet! To the point!! I like your poem! The first cup is always the best cup as long as you didn't get it from 2 girls!!! lolWww@QuestionHome@Com

Two suggestions:

1!. since your first two lines complete a single phrase, do the same with the second stanza!.!.!.try,

East breaks the day
In a moment pristine
Peaceful eyes see


2!. "Damn, this is a good cup" !.!.!."this a good cup" sounds too awkward!.

!.!.!.you had good images, keep writingWww@QuestionHome@Com

freshly brewed aroma drifts from kitchen to me!.!.!.!.!.nothing beats that first cup at dark thirty in the morning!. niceWww@QuestionHome@Com

I enjoyed the last line!. It brought clarity and reality to the etherealness of the poem!. ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Uh oh, Kevin's on you!. He's worse than the Poetry Police!. The last line just needs to go!. This is very good, without the expletive!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is very nice!. I can't imagine what it would be like to have that 1st cup gazing at open sea in all directions!.!.!.Very nice image indeed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good onyer!!! Seeing what you love revives the spiritedness of you!
Peaceful eyes see this as one damn good poem!!!
I'm finished now!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Damn, that was a good drink!

Hugs, maWww@QuestionHome@Com

OK,,,I won't read the last line,,,,I still like it though,,,

Hey ,,,I thought you left to go play Popeye!?!?

Or Am I Mistaken!?!? Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its good, as long as its full!Www@QuestionHome@Com

peaceful heart sees/sings!.Www@QuestionHome@Com