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Question: More poetry critique please!?
Once again, I can take constructive criticism, but don't be rude!. I wrote this in honor of my husband and all veterans of the US military!.

The anguish of the veteran,
so deep inside their souls,
has changed their lives and futures to be,
they had so many goals!.

But for our land and people they fought,
They did not ask us why,
they did their best to fight for us,
and watched their buddies die!.

The veterans will hide these thoughts,
and flashes of horrors they've seen,
until the time they rest their heads,
and it takes them back to that scene!.

They deserve respect for what they have done,
so many tears have been shed,
but the crying isn't for them you see,
it's the vets crying for their dead!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like you thought train and your journey you take the reader through!.
it is perfect in the way you express so simply the plight of the soldier!.
The effects of war travel like a shadow in these soldiers for their lives and never leaves them !.!.!. It is indeed a burden for all !.
You did a fine job!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your logic is perfect, I guess!. But remember, there's no such thing as Perfect!. It's what all artists make the mistake of assuming!. I wouldn't try to be so consistent, let it flow all over the place!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

All I can say is WOW!. Ok wait I can say more!. That was I feel the most beautfiful poem I have ever read!. Very touching, moving and sad!. Thank you for such a wonderful poem!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I just want to say thank you to your husband and to you!Www@QuestionHome@Com