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Question: A poem from 'Out My Back Door'!. Hope you like it!?
Sunday Morn
by Dag Drahmr

The field lay
!.!.hidden in the mist!.
Shadows move to and fro
!.!.creatures unknown!.
The smell
!.!.coffee perking!.
!.!.a distant car,
!.!.two crickets fiddling,
!.!.slap of fish in the pond!.

A sense of peace envelops me!.

!.!.Nature's domain,
!.!.God's Church,
I am home!.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Lovely Coop! You might have been describing my domain!
Delighted you put the coffee perking in!.!.!.that completes the theme!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Simple, and in its simplicity, sort of elegant!. I can readily link it to the world outside of my own back door!.
Love the fact that it isn't crowded with useless metaphors, similes and other oh so wrongly overused literary devices!.
Thanks for the piece of reality!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

"Out My Back Door" sounds dirty!.
The poem's fine though, last stanza seems a bit forced, comes out of nowhere!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I am comfortable there!.!. must be good!.
Natures domain is indeed my home!.

not the best ive heard sorryWww@QuestionHome@Com