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Question: Like or dislike my poem!?
please, if any of you disagree with the theme of this poemplease do not answer!. i really am not in the mood for people to diss my beliefs right now!.

Crosstalk

Considering every emotion I have laid down,
Trespassing every thought that I have swallowed!.
Dissolving every smile into!.!.!.
Into a concentrated frown,
Seeking every movement that I have followed!.

Breathe! And let your love ripple,
Let it spread out into a dozen rings!.
Grind the hatred it does cripple,
Soar like a!.!.!.
Like a dove on eagles wings!.

I'll feed your soul with the knowledge,
That I have moulded with bloody claws!.
I'll tell you things that!.!.!.
Things that no being could acknowledge,
If you let me drag your self-being over marble floors!.

Oh, my children with skin so warm,
I delight in you, I delight in the fact that you walk!.!.!.
That you think, that you move, that your heart beats!
I know you may follow the dead side of crosstalk,
But I tell you to ignore!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Your poem is very good!. You have done some very imaginative and original things!. For example, I love the way you pause at times, as if to gather your thoughts, and then proceed; it is very effective!. Regarding your other issues: I am not saying that I agree or disagree with your views, but i know that if we put our work out there for the public, we must be prepared for the public's opinion on all aspects of our work, not just the ones we choose!. I sometimes have some controversial views as well!. And as far as not receiving an answer for an hour, as artists we must learn patience sometimes!. Keep working on your poem; I think you have some good things to say and the talent to say them well!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Why ask if people dislike or like your poem if you do not want opinions!. If you like then continue to write!. But if you are sharing in this forum then be prepared for HONEST criticism!. I am assuming so I hope you can handle some honesty!.
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A very emotional piece!.!.!.I feel your confusion and questioning pain, although there are hidden metaphors!.!.!.well composed, Thanks for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Love it :) Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it i doubt ne1 would disagree with itWww@QuestionHome@Com

i love your poems!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! remember, i added one to my site!? so,yeah, youre good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.!.!.

wow!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.you sure do ask this question a lot,though!. thats a good thing,though!. one of the best ways to learn what you need to improve on!!!!!!!!!! dont stop!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
good luck,and remember,

"you never know how good you are until you realize how bad you are"

which means you cant let fame or popularity go to your head too much because thats when you start sucking!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.and i dont want that to happen to you!. dont give people what they want, give them what they cant imagine!. one of the most awesome things that gives poets and writers and scripters and speakers edge and popularity is how they give what they want to,not what the people want,and thats when the people realize thats want they really want and people then start to talk!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. one things leads to another, and BAM! youre the next big thing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

sorry,but i hope that made sense!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.sorta in a rush, so i had to hurry!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com