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[yup this is reposted]
I'm new to writing and this one was just a quick spur of the moment!.
I know that it's not that good or deep!.!.!.but I felt the need to share it because we all feel like this sometimes-

I knew it wasn't meant to last
just a temporary lapse
couldn't help but falling for you
right from the start I knew
that there were so many others
and I was just another
couldn't help catching a glance
she smilies, eyes locked
I know too well what she's thinking
intrigued and locked in conversation
everything else seems like just an affiliation
the other; a girl with soft curls
she laughs and your hands brush,
if only for a second, it's a second too much
look at those fools, choking on your words
and yet they still come back for more
still how could I blame them
I was once starving too
famished for your attention
and a thirst that was brand new
and so the saying goes
'there are other fish in the sea'
tell me though, how you get back out fishing
when your heart has broken freeWww@QuestionHome@Com

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