AUTUMN
Golden foliage falls
Dancing, twirling, blue ballet
Sad, chattering wind
WINTER IDLE
Prowling wolf, ice cold
Hunger melts under his clothes
Bread lays before him
Shugofa Danesh
9/21/08
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Golden foliage falls Dancing, twirling, blue ballet Sad, chattering wind WINTER IDLE Prowling wolf, ice cold Hunger melts under his clothes Bread lays before him Shugofa Danesh 9/21/08 ? the author Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: They are both very evocative and I like them, especially "Autumn" However, to be pedantic, why the apostrophe in haikus, does foliage have only two syllables, and when at school I was taught that chickens lay eggs !! Sorry!! But I do like the!.!."twirling, blue ballet" !! Www@QuestionHome@Com very nice, but I'm not sure why the ballet is blue!. Otherwise, very good images!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |