I have written a morning offering, will you comment?

Question: I have written a morning offering, will you comment!?

Catnap
By C!.S!. Scotkin

George and Grace,
tangled motionless
multicolored breathing
ball of yarn,
melted into the carpet!.

Dream me a
Cat’s eye dawn!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

that's fine!.!.!.!.!.and the last two lines are special
'Dream me a
Cat's eye dawn'

what would it be like!? their world and their emotions!.!.!.the way they see and perceive!.!.!.or that of birds!.!.!.when the sun rises up!.!.!.when they start to sing!.!.!.what would their little hearts be saying!? anything of innocence!.!.!.may beWww@QuestionHome@Com

Don't listen to the people who say you need to add more!. This is really pretty!. Poems are supposed to be like riddles!. They need to make you think about what the poet is talking about!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I can't really say why - but I just liked it!. The visual was warm and fuzzy - very artistic and pleasing!. Yes Yes Yes !! ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Cute description!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Pretty!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I dont think its obvious what you mean - so perhaps you could add some more - put more ideas in!?
a bit too short in my view - give us more!
gd luckWww@QuestionHome@Com

Very nice :)
Make it more bigger :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sweet !.Www@QuestionHome@Com

peaceful,lucky are you!.makes me want to gather mine up n catnap too!Www@QuestionHome@Com

that was so short and sweet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

NICEWww@QuestionHome@Com

Are they not a lovely vision at this moment!?!?!? YES!!Www@QuestionHome@Com