Do you think this is a good metaphor?

Question: Do you think this is a good metaphor!?

i need to write one in English class about someone i care about!.

My sister is the ocean!.
she is deep,
and full of life!.
Sometimes she is calm,
sometimes she is raging with anger!.
She is mysterious,
you never know what is going on
through her head!.
She can wear you down with
her strength and determination!.

Any feedback!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I think it has a really great beginning, but I think stronger ending with more impact would add a little more to it!
I like it so far :)
Really good, Good luck
Www@QuestionHome@Com

Really nice, so far!. I love your word choice and the metaphor is really cool, too!. But, you need an ending!. I'm not sure if you are done yet but if you are, you should add more - if you're not, keep going! It's a great start!.

Good luck! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love it -- so far!. If you're not done with it, then I would work on ending it a little bit more!.!.!. poetically =]!.
But yeah, the metaphor is great!Www@QuestionHome@Com

=] Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good job, it makes sense! Www@QuestionHome@Com