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Question: Would you care to critique my *Words*!?
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.It Is
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Early morning
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Sun not yet fully up
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Slice of moon in the sky
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.I stealthily
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Slip out to my deck
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Towel in hand
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Dropping my gown,
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Stepping into the water
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Hot,as well soothing
On this chilly Autumn morning
!.!.!.!.Sinking into the water
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.It occurs to me
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Naked as I am
!.!.!.!.How comforting it feels
!.!.!.!.!.!. embraced warmly
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.in this moment
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.As if I had
!.!.!.!.!.traveled back in time
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Returning to
!.!.the comfort of the womb
!.!.From whence I was born
!.!.!.!.!.Feeling momentarily
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Warm
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Content
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. ~Loved~
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I not only like the imagery of your poem, I envy you your spa! Well done on both counts!Www@QuestionHome@Com
A luxury to rise before the sun has fully risen and to have a spa to enjoy!. A peaceful time before the day starts, free of the problems of the day before or the day that is coming!. Beautiful words! Truly like being in the womb, I would imagine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
You just go ahead and relax!.!.!. It's not me using the Global Positioning Satellite to home in on you!. I'm just tapped into the camera!.
You are a very talented poet!.!.!. the more I read you the more I like you!. This poem made me feel relaxed and wishing for a warm hottub to crawl into!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.It Is
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Early morning
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Sun not yet fully up
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Slice of moon in the sky
Love that picture!. The sliver and the full - my favorites!.
Wonderful feel at the end!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I loved this!
Had to think what a different tone it is to my Submerged one yesterday!
What a difference a day makes! I much prefer your dip in the tub!
maWww@QuestionHome@Com
Stumbling for words
I slip by
Drip drying off
To find a place
That takes me thereWww@QuestionHome@Com
I prefer to submerge in the ocean!. That is our real womb!.Www@QuestionHome@Com