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Question: Guys: Would you like it if a girl gave you this!? !?
a silent smile,
a happy thought,
mind taken to,
a desolate spot,

that is your presence,
warm and safe,
movements slowed by,
calming grace,

sights set on such,
a perfect grin,
makes mine emerge,
as love begins,

blossoming like little flowers,
imagining you each assing hour,

as i drown in,
the bluest oceans,
showiing off your,
every emotion,

waves of happiness,
crashing fears,
i hope those eyes,
don' shed a tear,

on my account
my dear you see,
you mean so much,
a lot to me,

as i fall deeper
in to thought
i realize now
while not distraught

that though at times
alone i fail
no matter what
our love prevails

so hold on tight
no dont let go
dont speak a word
if you desire so

just stay right here
alone with me
on cold wet grass
beneath this tree
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
very good poem
even though i'm not a guy, i still enjoy the poem and understand where you are coming from
one note: there is that one couplet of lines that, although could fit, looks like it does not because every other group of lines is of four!. if you could somehow make that four lines, it would fit in fine!.
"blossomng like little flowers,
imagining you each passing hour
i wish to feel your touch
but not be influenced by your power"

just an improv idea

check out my poem:
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