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Question: Is any of this poem unclear!?
Forth I sailed in oak and canvas,
Over sea and over plain!.
To the creaking of the rigging,
To the horses’ ceaseless strain!.
And I heard the mermaids singing,
And I saw the North Star Shine,
And I watched the forests dimming
In a long unending line!.
I have seen the sun rise strangely,
I have tracked a hunter’s moon,
I have traced the falcon’s spiral,
Through the burning afternoon!.
I have tasted torrents roaring,
I have touched the mountain’s face,
I have felt the people jostle,
I have found a little space!.
And I carved my gods in granite,
And I walked upon the sand,
And I mapped new worlds of wonders,
In a rough unlettered hand!.
I have seen the heavens flicker,
I have made my mark upon
All the corners of imagining,
And the voyager voyages on!.
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A adventure poem on both sea and land!. It has a nice bouncy rhythm to it and I can imagine myself listening to the story teller as he relates his adventures!. Each line leaves much to the imagination so that the poem takes the reader on and on into a world of adventure!.
I have read it in another way without having to many repeats of the same words:-
I have seen the sun rise strangely
Tracked a hunters moon,
Traced the falcon's spiral
Through the burning afternoon!.
Leaving out some of the repeated words still makes this poem acceptable!.
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Amazing poem, but what do you mean when you write:
"To the creaking of the rigging,
To the horses’ ceaseless strain!."
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Just that when referring to God and Heaven you must use capital G and H!. It's just the proper way!.!.!.!.like you spell your name Mike R!. other than that is is a nice poem!.!.!.!.well put!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
no it is Beautiful xxWww@QuestionHome@Com
no its beautiful!.did you write that!?PUBLISH IT!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
over plain!.
Ships tend not to travel over landWww@QuestionHome@Com
Yeah, the first opening line!. You can't sail in oak and canvas dummy, you need water to sail in!. The fact that you've quoted sea in the second sentence alienates the first sentence even more!. Forests arent generally illuminated (unless theyre full of disney fireflys) so I didn't understand that one either!. A lot of it doesnt make sense in any artistic context or otherwise!. It's like you just slapped the words together hoping to emulate an era of poetry which was all pompus anyway!.
well, im sorry janine but its all just pretentiouis BS isnt it, lets be honest!. Obviously the 1st sentence is supposed to be a reference to a boat but the word "in" doesnt help!. also, theres a specific ref to the forest dimming after the north star shines - how the hell did you make sense of that one!?
I don't want the writer to tell us what he meant, I think he / she should keep their day job!. Perhaps the writer will vote for their own answer under an alternate account, do you think!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like poetry, and I don't find this poem confusing, though it does need some thought :) The first bit is about ships and covered wagons, both made of wood and canvas of course :) and I like the idea of the wagons sailing over the plain pulled by the horses!. Is that it!?
Not sure why Mark P is upset by the forests dimming!. The whole world dims at evening, so why not forests!?
I still dont see what is upsetting you Mark!. The first line works equally well for ships and waggons, and ships and waggons are made of wood and cavas, and you travel in them!.!.so you travel in wood and canvas!. Simple!. And the poem doesn't say that North Star rose and then the forests went dim does it!? They are listed as separate events not necessarily related to eachother!. Your reading seems to be rather literal, and not very poetic!.
Anyway, this is my first post, and I don't want to fight!. You think your way, I will think mine!. Perhaps the writer will tell us exactly what he meant!.Www@QuestionHome@Com