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Question: A poem from the heart!.!. I know its long but PLEEASE give me advice!!?
I gave you my heart even though I was afraid
I told you how I felt and you said we were SECURE
In the beginning I thought WE had it made
But in the end I had a lot of feelings to ENDURE

I am writing this poem to let you know
I really DO care and I tried to let it show

You will not talk to me even though YOU were wrong
You act like I did something that made you feel pain
When I am the one that is sick and alone
Stuck with feelings of wanting to change

Wanting to change because I cant take no more pain
Wanting to change and just be the same

The same as those girls I told you I despise
The ones who cheat and steal and simply don’t care
The ones who will lie while you look them dead in the eye
Like the one that you left me for; I thought you cared…

I love you with all of my being
And didn’t realize how much until I caught you cheating

Cheating with someone still in high school
Cheating with someone who is still involved
I never thought you would be such a fool
I never thought you would make me feel unloved

I want you to know that I always wanted the best for you
And regardless of how you treated me; I STILL DO

I want you to know that I do understand
I shouldn’t have put my hands on you no matter what
I know I was wrong because youre a grown *** man
And I sincerely apologize but, at that particular time, I aint give ONE ****

Because you treated me like **** and I did nothing to US
But you still decided that you wanted to throw ME under the bus

You were wrong for that and I know you know
Because I saw it in your eyes the day we broke up
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
poetry!.com is a scam! dont go there!. And this really dosent sound like a poem, its more of a monologue or letter!. But, I think your just venting, and writing is a great way to do so!. Im not sure whats going on in your life!. but no matter what, there is always something you should do when you loose something!. Evaluate what went wrong, and how you should have went about, use those lessons learned, and move on!. Its as simple as that!. Use pain as a teacher!. good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com

you need to count the syllables because it doesn't flow!.
also ryhming the first sentence with the 2nd last doesn't work!.
2nd sentence and last work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

don't forget "you are like a flower, because flowers follow the son, even when cloudy"Www@QuestionHome@Com

Don't get so tied up in structure!. Free verse!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow! that was awesome!. you should publish it at poetry!.comWww@QuestionHome@Com