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Question: What say you of this "Love's Imprint" poem!?
Love's Imprint

Angry child squats in amber field
burdened by troubles he wrought upon himself!.
Red, swollen eyes catch a butterfly in flight,
its freedom and lightness sharp contrast
to his own caged existence
unpalatable truth his only key
left for desperate escape!.
He watches wings busily flutter
creating a kaleidoscope of vibrant colors,
beauty too pure and piercing for
broken boy to behold!.
He swiftly snatches royar monarch mid-air
driven to transfer his pain onto another!.
Deliberately each wing he tears and destroys!.
Malicious act, though, yields no desired relief!.
Instead, transferred onto boy's fingers,
a rainbow of radiant residue remains!.
Still angry child furiously wipes hands
on faded jeans!.
Vulnerable thing of beauty leaves
indelible imprint,
its sacrificial last act, unappreciated!.
A truth
wounded child may never comprehend!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Beautiful poetry, the message comes through clearly!.
(shouldn't it be "royal" monarch, though!?)Www@QuestionHome@Com

When dad grounded me, I always had a long list of "yard chores" to do as "added" punishment!.

Pouting and crying first, then I'd go out back and torture potato bugs!.

They'd curl up into little gray balls to defend themselves until I stomped them!.

Beauty dies under the soles of Timberland!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That child must have very frustrated to tear up a butterfly!. I have seen a boy slap a cat which he loved when he was frustrated!. The cat just stayed loyal to him and did not even run!. I like the description of the butterfly!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love it! It is beautiful and touching!. I would think about changing the title, it doesnt seem to match the Emotion and the Tone of the Poem!. the words are very deep and strong and resemble a fire!.!.!.!.!.

It is beautifulWww@QuestionHome@Com

And what are "they" saying now - that a child who mutilates animals - may grow up to harm people!? Is a butterfly considered to be an "animal"!? ?

http://www!.oregonanimallaw!.com/!?p=54Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!.!.!.very original and different!. I love it when someone comes up with their own thoughtful and different ideas!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's good, but personally not many can comprehend the beauty of insects!.

Yeah, I know what you were going for!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A truly sad & beautiful poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Stark emotions in children can seem very dark at first sight!. Hope he gets over it before he becomes President!Www@QuestionHome@Com

You know your way around a thesaurus, that's for sure!.
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So sad!.!.!. tears for the child and the butterfly!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

So sad!.!.!.There are too many angry children in this world!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Junk in your trunkWww@QuestionHome@Com

it's really interesting!.!.i read it twice!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i loved it!. great message!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

makes sense to me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com