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Question: What do you think about those lines!.!.!.!?
O! My God

This pain I m going through

Will deliver me to the death

My heart fell to pieces

Like a broken glass!.

My heart gets so weak that

I cant even breathe!.

It seems that this pain will never stop

O! My God only you can stop it

I beg you to stop this pain

I beg you deck out my life with kindness

I beg you bring me back to live

I beg you grant her to me

I beg you I only beg you and ask for from you
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Sounds like a prayer!. Which is good!. They're great, keep writing and maybe you can give this to that nice girl and then maybe God can grant you the prayer you ask of Him!. I wish I could write as good as you!. I haven't written in years!.

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It is a nice thought and I'm sure it is well intended!. The problem is that it is a plethora of cliches, one after another!. A hint: if you have heard an expression somewhere, so has everyone else!. It is worth taking the time to revise; keep working on it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

My answer is like this!. You are praying to god!.who is sitting at the top of the mountain and watching you and everyone in this world and listening ta your prayers!. You are asking go to always be with you and purify you!.forgive your sins!.

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