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Question: "Stop Switch"!.!.!.What of a poem on trickery!?

Stop Switch

Once upon a dream
It all was gone
No more demons
Silence in voices
Chance to choose mind
Derailing internal stirrings
No more loathing the nights
Slumber sleeping in
And then I wondered!?

If it all stopped
Would it all stop!?

A dream or a nightmare!?

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Your poem is excellent! The places our mind takes us when we are unconscious is a wonder -- sometimes good, sometimes frightening, sometimes lost!. If you can learn to Lucid Dream -- this is where you become aware of the dream, and interject your own control to make whatever happen that you wise!. I managed once to stop my ex-finance from killing me in the dream; and he is an ex,so I survived what my subconscious mind was trying to tell me!.

Stop Switch <-- great title

Once upon a dream <--- love the beginning
It all was gone <-- setting up the scene
No more demons <-- intriguing catch

Silence in voices <-- IMO stanza break here
Chance to choose mind <-- this sounds like lucid dreaming
Derailing internal stirrings <-- oh yes, I need sleep too
No more loathing the nights <-- sleeping pills help
Slumber sleeping in <-- mornings always come to early!
And then I wondered!? <--- the perfect closing

If it all stopped
Would it all stop!? <-- and your summation is masterful!.

A dream or a nightmare!? <-- IMO not necessary; play with the line moving it to different areas of the poem

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Once upon a Nightmare,
A dream took me away!.
A place of peace and,
Tranquil,
I truly thought I'd stay!.

Then as with all our dreams,
I woke up,!.!. once more!.
The nightmare now,
Was by far,!.!. worse,
Than had ever
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Dreams are answers to questions we have already asked!. Not so nightmares!.!.!.!.fight the demons in those!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Could you stop a Wave ,,,,I say not
Dreams ,,turning to Nightmares
Turning to Night Sweats!.!.!.!.


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Total silence is abysmal at best
I like my white noise!.!.
fish tanks!.!.
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